Persuasive+writing

   __  Persuasive Writing. __  __  Honda motorbikes are better than KTM. __  This is my first writing sample. I believe that honda motorbikes are better than KTM''s because Honda's bikes are at prices that most people can afford and they last for a long time and are good reliable bikes. With KTM's they're exspensive bikes and they are top quality but Honda's are better for price and performance. On the other hand KTM's do have a big variety but Honda's are cool. If someone did a survey i bet that most riders would prefer Honda motorbikes. They rock.

This is the writing sample that we did in pairs      To whom it may concern…      My class are arranging a fun, exciting and worthwhile class experience up at the snow and I was wondering if you my dear parents who I love you so much could let me go. I have been looking forward to this ski trip since I heard about it. Just imagine how much fun I would have in the snow playing with my friends and my spade. And I would really appreciate it if you my lovely parents would please let me go on this exciting class experience.      The skills and learning experiences will include relating to others by organising the trip and we will also learn to manage ourselves better by doing what we should be doing and looking after ourselves and duties. We will learn to be more responsible by having our own jobs to do and completing them. We will also be more responsible by organising it by ourselves. If I go to this ski trip it would be amazing.      I would really like it if you could let me go because I learn a lot and I will have a lot of fun. If you let me go I will be really good.       Your trust is our future <span style="FONT-FAMILY: Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif">     Yours sincerely, <span style="COLOR: #000000; FONT-FAMILY: 'Arial Black', Gadget, sans-serif"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif"> <span style="COLOR: #000000; FONT-FAMILY: 'Arial Black', Gadget, sans-serif"><span style="DISPLAY: block; FONT-FAMILY: Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif; TEXT-ALIGN: left">     Eli Karlsson and Kiko Rodriguez

Goal: For my next writing sample I need to work on <span style="FONT-SIZE: 110%; FONT-FAMILY: Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif; msoFareastFontFamily: 'Times New Roman'mso-ansi-language"> correct use of full stops, capitals, commas, exclamation marks speech marks and question marks, making my story longer, persuasive language, <span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: Arial; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-fareast-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA">Parent comment: the pairs persuasive writing i have read here on kikos' web site is a fine example of manipulation of parents with not so subtle compliments and, as a rule, it generally works quite well in our household.

This is my third writing sample and my final one

__ Motocross should be an Olympic sport  __ I reckon that Motocross should be an Olympic because there are hundreds of talented New Zealand motorbike rider and trail riders that go unrecognised. One of the things people would do on a farm would be to go out on a quick ride out on there paddock or on a homemade track. And in the weekend enter races around the community. And motocross is one of the fittest sports in the variety. People like Levi Sherwood, Mary Perkins, Katherine Prumm, Damian King, Darrel Hurley, Broxy Holmes, and Josh Coppins are some of the best motocross riders. Especially Josh Coppins who’s a world champion at motocross. Even though there is X-games, Demon supercross, and Crusty Demons it would be a chance for New Zealand to stand out and win some more gold medals!!! I personally think that New Zealand would do great in the Olympics.

If I had everyone agreed with this situation then I reckon New Zealand would be prouder than ever at the Olympics in 2012 in London. Bring it home New Zealand!!! ·  Spelling || Most commonly used words are spelt correctly || No more than 10% spelling errors and developing breadth in word usage || No more than 5% spelling errors and developing breadth of word usage appropriate to genre || ·  Main Ideas || includes several ideas, some with supporting detail || beginning to support main ideas with increasing detail || consistently includes details to support main ideas || Ideas are linked logically through paragraphs || beginning to vary sentences using conjunctions || varies sentence beginnings and length beginning to vary sentence structures in a variety of ways and may use complex sentences || varies sentence beginnings and sentence length to suit purpose. Sentence structures varied using complex sentences with subordinate clauses. || ·   Repetition || Uses repetition without effect || beginning to use repetition and achieve desired effect. Acheived || Uses repletion effectively ||
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 * Surface Features
 * ·  Punctuation || Mostly correct use of full stops, capitals, commas and question marks. Beginning to use question marks || Mostly correct use of full stops, capitals, commas, exclamation marks speech marks and question marks ||  Accurate use of full stops, capitals, commas, exclamation marks speech marks, question marks, apostrophes, parentheses, ||
 * ·  Vocabulary || || || ||
 * Deeper Features
 * ·  Paragraphing || some sequencing is evident ||  ideas are beginning to be organised into paragraphs  || paragraphs are easy to read and have supporting detail for main ideas.
 * ·  Sentence Structure ||  beginning to vary sentence length and beginnings
 * Specific Language Features
 * ·  Emotion || <span style="COLOR: #f3f116; FONT-FAMILY: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif">beginning to use emotive words || beginning to use emotive language that appeals to audience || Uses emotive language effectively to convey desired message to audience ||
 * ·  Structure || attempts to grab audience attention and give an opinion statement || Grabs audience attention and attempts to give clear opinion statement ||  Grabs audience attention and gives clear opinion statement  ||

Reflection: I am sure that i have used enough persuasive launguage to have acheived the purpose of persuasive writing <span style="FONT-SIZE: 80px; FONT-FAMILY: Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif; msoAnsiLanguage: EN-AU">